Friday, May 14, 2010

What think you of this 'rose' poem?

The Rose





The evening sky a pale rose


ripening into deep claret


pouring across the horizon





As the horizon deepens


burgundy velvet


caresses your skin


as pale rose scent


fills an empty room





Lovliness does not hide


stides forth, brazen


with song, with answers


from lands unknown





Once Pangea


why division


winds bear petals


across this ocean





The rose knows


a home








Elysabeth

What think you of this 'rose' poem?
It is word soup.
Reply:Loveliness brazen...with song. Another unique image. I'm in love with Pangea and often think of the division you speak of in your poem. The rose is also as sweet as wine, burgundy and claret, giving the poem taste as well as vision.
Reply:Since the writer is female, I am assuming the subject looking at the sunset is also. The faint scent of roses to be either a vase of roses or a rose scented perfume. Burgandy velvet the touch of the evening sun on bare skin. I get the vision of a lady sitting or standing looking out a westward facing window onto a beautiful sunset, probably nude or near nude waiting for someone in lands unknown to come back to her. The rose knows a home, to me says that the someone she awaits knows where she is and she likens him to a rose.


just my opinion, of course, and I have been known to be wrong.





Dondi
Reply:I liked the poem very much. Then when I realized it was about two lovers, I liked it even more. That's what I have now. I'm here and my boyfriend is in the UK. The poem was beautiful.
Reply:I like it, wait, no, I love it!
Reply:I really love your poems - they are very pretty even without a meaning underneath the surface! One of my favorite parts of reading poetry is searching for the hidden meaning, and I love your poems because you really do have to search - it's not right there.
Reply:I LUV i love ur choice of words and keep up the great writing!
Reply:Makes me wish I was one of the petals being carried by the wind. Bravo!!!
Reply:very heart warming thanks 4 sharing it
Reply:Wow, you're a Deva de la jardin Terra. Very nice indeed!
Reply:Hi sweetie I don't know that much about certain kinds of poetry,but even when I don;t give you an answer I do come and read them.And sometimes my heart swells and feels like it will burst. It Is beautiful and even though It Is cold and gloomy where I live when I read this poem I felt It was a beautiful day and I was lying in a field with a wonderful breeze blowing and looking up at the clouds and the birds were singing, sea gulls in the air just one of those days when you don't have a care in the world and you are one with nature.And then I finished and reality sets back in.lol So when I need a lift I come back to your poems often like this one for another high. if you don't get a reply from me know that Sunny 743 is reading your wonderful poems. Bye Hon
Reply:love comes between two people no mater how far they are apart.
Reply:Apart from your beautiful word choice, what I truly like about your poems is that they always require several reads to get the meaning, atleast for me anyway.
Reply:I really thought your poem to be really beautiful .I loved the theme of roses and how you chose just the right words for it..Nice..
Reply:It made me feel unclean. I like the sentiment but the undertones were overwhelming
Reply:Very nice. I like the continental drift...
Reply:I'm with Swoosh, it's pretty fun and interesting to try to find the real meaning behind your words. After reading it a few times, I get the image of blushing skin known only to the exploration of a lovers touch. I'm probably all wrong, but it's the image I get and I still enjoy reading it.
Reply:Great choice of words, small simple lines.


I like it.


8/10


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