Sunday, April 26, 2009

The Rose - poem?

I wrote this poem for my husband for valentines day- and i gave him a red rose w/ it. :)








This Rose





I took this rose


From my heart.


It’s been growing


From the start.





It will only live


For at least, 3 days through


Just to tell you how much


I’m in love with you.





As it dies,


its magic will stay.


Forever in your heart


To remind you everyday…





That when we hold hands,


kiss, and touch.


Each moment together,


each moment in love.





That nothing can compare of how I feel


When I’m with you.


And I’m hoping that you feel


The same way too.





Just a little bit of love made our


Rose Garden start,


If you ever need another rose,


All you have to do, is reach into my heart.

The Rose - poem?
I like it. it is pretty good, there is however a change I would make; "That nothing can compare of how I feel" I would change that to; "That nothing can compare to how I feel. Now that is just a simple suggestion from a simple person.
Reply:That was very sweet. Iam sure your husband would have been mighty pleased if you gift him with such a beautiful poem. You must really love your husband to write such a romantic poem.
Reply:find the poem so so. The part where you tell of your heart, how it is that it is a rose, is really touching.
Reply:aww thats so sweet! i liked it!


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